Pretty close, save that I wouldn't use abbreviations in the text here, since this should be considered newbie text.
But it was only meant to be a suggestion, or at least a starting point for additional discussion. :-) If others feel it's not needed, then it's not needed.
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Dr. Michael K. Neylon - mneylon-pm@masemware.com
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