A couple of suggestions:

  1. The word 'is' is rather pointless when you're using an =.
  2. Using my implies that the variable is being initialized... and it doesn't make much sense to assign a varible, as it's being initialized, to another.

So, for instance, I might (assuming I were in love with Claudia as well) rewrite the first line as: 

my $true_love = $Claudia;
# or perhaps
my $true_love = 'Claudia';
# or at least 
$Claudia = my $true_love;

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Otherwise, I like it.

LAI, who has done way too much "real" poetry critique
:eof

In reply to Re: I Love my girl by LAI
in thread I Love my girl by cored

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