Re: I laughed, I cried, I...

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Re^2: I laughed, I cried, I... by Eliana (Scribe) on Jan 30, 2007 at 10:00 UTC
...but it doesn't scan. How 'bout: "I laughed, I cried, and then I replied."? or "I laughed, I cried, I lay down and died?" :) ...what a dreadful thing to have stuck in my head! Eliana	[reply]
Re^3: I laughed, I cried, I... by wolfger (Deacon) on Jan 31, 2007 at 13:17 UTC
Sorry, but that doesn't scan any better. It's one syllable over instead of one syllable under. I laughed, I cried, I then replied. Much better. :-) -- Random Synapse Firing	[reply] [d/l]
Re^4: I laughed, I cried, I... by Eliana (Scribe) on Feb 01, 2007 at 02:44 UTC
Well... your version is a perfect iambic tetrameter, but I think the anapest at the end of 'and then I replied' gives a sense of playfulness and fits better with the rhythm of the words, yours is more...formal, don't you think? But, yes, yours is technically superior - and I should have checked the scansion of my doggeral before critiquing someone else's! But, I must confess, I scan (and write) more by instinct and how something sounds to me... it has been interesting to see when that tendency is as asset (or not!) as I learn to code. After more than 14 years of marriage to Yitzchak (ysth), I can finally do more than turn a computer on and off and use Microsoft Word! I've been amazed at how much artistry and beauty there can be in code... I had never thought of programming as potentially poetical. Anyway, thank you for playing with me. :) Eliana	[reply]
Re^5: I laughed, I cried, I... by wolfger (Deacon) on Feb 01, 2007 at 12:48 UTC
Re^6: I laughed, I cried, I... by Eliana (Scribe) on Feb 01, 2007 at 18:57 UTC
Re^4: I laughed, I cried, I... by belg4mit (Prior) on Feb 02, 2007 at 21:38 UTC
d'I replied `-- In Bob We Trust, All Others Bring Data.`	[reply]