One of the functions of art is to invoke a response. On this note I'd say this is pretty successful as Poetry.
hmm, i dont think the poetry in question is particularly artistic - in both a Perl and a Poetic sense. To me it looks more like a thinly veiled, uninsightful statement.
I agree with the sentiments of yourself and of the original post - but debate of the latter being controversial art (which was stated by someone, somewhere in this mess) is just pretentious.